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Saturday, January 4, 2014

Possible blurb for Radio Hope. What do you think?

My trip to Tangier is winding down and now I need to think about my tough publishing schedule over the next year. First up is my post-apocalyptic novel Radio Hope! Below is the proposed blurb. I'd love to have your feedback. Blurbs are tough.


In a world shattered by war, disease, and pollution. . .
. . .a female gunslinger longs to find a safe refuge for her son. . .
. . .a frustrated revolutionary delivers water to villagers living on a toxic waste dump. . .
. . .the assistant mayor of humanity’s last city hopes he will never have to take command. . .
. . .only to find their lives changing forever when a mad prophet and his army of fanatics march out of the wildlands on a crusade to purify the world through conquest.

5 comments:

  1. I vote for #2. The story instantly takes on an emotional layer with any family connection.

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    1. Thanks, D.G. Actually I'm thinking of using the whole thing, because all three protagonists are important.

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  2. Sorry Sean, I changed my mind at the last moment. I like #2.

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  3. Catches my interest but I think I'd put mother or Mom instead of female
    And perhaps changed or change instead of changing in the last part.
    Just sayin'
    Yes blurbs are tough.

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  4. Hi Sean,

    Sounds like an intriguing project.

    I agree with Rita's comments. Blurbs are hard:

    Here are my suggestions:

    Change the first to "a gunslinging mom . . ."
    And the second from "frustrated revolutionary" to "dedicated revolutionary."

    Question about the last part: Purify the world of what?

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