tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8498840600741973651.post8189924837822934667..comments2023-12-28T10:51:17.330-06:00Comments on Civil War Horror: Blurb version 2.0Sean McLachlanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09778503397743759469noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8498840600741973651.post-59897674722617072062014-03-13T05:58:53.024-05:002014-03-13T05:58:53.024-05:00I don't know. I'm okay keeping that the w...I don't know. I'm okay keeping that the way it is. Maybe "Toxic World" is the uniting title for this series? And reminding readers of the other extant story in the series to date isn't such a bad thing. And to let antsy readers apparently eager to read something short know right from the start that they don't have to worry about that is also a good call.Tony Laplumehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07854455859399339169noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8498840600741973651.post-24672603931883683022014-03-12T17:32:46.182-05:002014-03-12T17:32:46.182-05:00I like the change you made from the first version....I like the change you made from the first version. It is very enticing and paints a clear picture of the story premise.<br /><br />But that last sentence with a capitalized name, a title, a word count and a vague description that would fit any post-apocalyptic setting detract from the powerful paragraphs above. Maybe think about changing that?Dianne K. Salernihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16459839567235304842noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8498840600741973651.post-47732382111680032482014-03-12T13:47:35.165-05:002014-03-12T13:47:35.165-05:00A subtle but important distinction. Good one.A subtle but important distinction. Good one.Tony Laplumehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07854455859399339169noreply@blogger.com